Thread:Justjackbros/@comment-25867149-20141216160100/@comment-25867149-20150119162812

I've nearly finished writing the story treatment but I need some help with the third act, the bit where the four main characters (pictured below) run into their first paranormal encounter. I wasn't entirely happy with the first draft because while it worked quite well as a story that could be rounded off quickly, I felt that it didn't portray the proper dynamic between the characters, especially since at this point, Johnny and Ben hadn't met yet (Ben hitched a lift with Jackie (Rachel) whilst she was looking for Toast, they get separated and she meets Toast at random whilst Ben goes off to the sight of the paranormal encounter by himself) and Ben's not exactly the most trusting individual.

Any ideas please? I'm desperate.