Talk:Fan: The VenturianTale National Character Tournamant (Fan Fiction)/@comment-24238747-20140411231821/@comment-24238747-20140412194424

Also, make sure you add detail. Instead of writing:

He walked to the desk. He asked Jim if he could go. He went.

Do:

Bill walked to the desk, and glancing at the paper, he turned around to Jim. "Can I go? I have somewhere to be.", Bill said. Jim nodded, and Bill went out the door

But you get it. Also, too much detail is boring