Board Thread:Special Projects Division/@comment-25867149-20180227154006/@comment-25867149-20180814210807

ElectricFire 169 wrote:Leah, for some reason, decides to rejoin the PIE team after having left seven years prior. Despite the fact that she is technically the most senior PIE member in the California area and the group being in desperate need of a new leader following the death of Johnny Coast (and of course she could pull rank if she wanted to, being you-know-who's sister, but of course we and she don't want that to get out just yet) she has to go through some training program to make sure that is the right person for the job. So with that she is bundled with the other trainees - Adam Wolverton, who was sent across from the North Carolina division; Samantha, whom they rescued from an interdimensional rift after two years of struggling to survive in a realm between realms; and I assume some of the other characters like Adelaide, Nathan, Stanley etc etc. Joining them for today is PIE legend Johnny Toast, whom they don't realise is actually his evil twins other Gavin and has been given powers by an unknown force in exchange for infiltrating the California team and doing stuff by a powerful as-yet-unnamed entity whilst the real McCoy has disappeared whilst searching for Johnny Ghost, who went missing not long before during an investigation of the house of Swift Taylor. Of course the two people who first cotton onto that something is up with Toast is Leah, who knew Toast quite well when he was younger, and Wolverton, who was only talking to him within the last two weeks.

After the training exercises are seemingly complete, there's an incursion report at an old abandoned warehouse and everyone, including the rookies, are sent to investigate that. During this investigation all the regular PIE members disappear, apparently caught by the ghost, and the rookies of course panic and flee. Gavin uses the chaos to make his move and makes a hasty exit, not realising he has been spotted by somebody.

So Adam - who seems to be the only other person in a calm enough state to get any work done - finds some clues lying around and figures out that the ghost is a former PIE member. The ghost reveals itself as Johnny Coast, who wants revenge for being abandoned by his team. After a tense battle, Adam defeats Coast with a quantum storage device.

It turns out of course that this has all been a training exercise, the warehouse is owned by PIE's parent company and Coast was in on the whole thing; meanwhile Leah has been following 'Johnny', and finds that someone else also followed him and got badly injured. She quickly exposes Gavin just as he releases a bunch of previously-captured ghosts on them. Gavin reveals his true powers and, with the aid of the little battle assist monster things he got and his new powers, starts attacking the PIE members.

At this point Samantha, who hasn't really done much this entire time, suddenly decides to reveal that she has powers of her own and uses them to battle Gavin. Whilst she's doing that, Leah and Adam regroup with the rest of the interns and PIE members (and Johnny Coast) and they all get to recapturing the escaped ghosts and creatures and stuff.

In the end it turns out Gavin doesn't have the necessary skill to beat Samantha because of his inexperience with them and he gets his butt thoroughly kicked. The ghosts are all recaptured, Gavin somehow escapes and the interns (or the main five anyway) get promoted to PIE member proper (or whatever the title is). Just as they're on the way out, Leah is very suprised to see an old 'friend' of hers, who tells her 'you can't escape your past... Jackie.'

In the epilogue, Gavin reports back to his master saying that the infiltration was successful. All that's revealed of the 'master' is a bright yellow eye. There's a generic speech about revenge and Gavin finds is rather boring. Randomcommentsinc wrote:Thanks, but I don't fit particularly well in other's shoes. I'll give the storyline a try though.

How exactly are we doing this?

My attempts

1. In medias res happens

title sequence

flashback 1 (Samantha)

flashback 2 (other guy w/ flashback)

Rookies arrive

Gavin Pretends to be Jhonny

rookies are sent to investigate stuff.

Leah figures out Gavin's infiltration

wolf guy w/ flashback defeats the ghost

It's a training exercise

Leah follows 'Johnny'

Gavin exposed

Samantha attacks

they win and get promoted

credits

????

2. In medias res happens

title sequence

Rookies arrive

Gavin Pretends to be Jhonny

rookies are sent to investigate stuff.

Leah figures out Gavin's infiltration

wolf guy w/ flashback defeats the ghost

It's a training exercise

Leah follows 'Johnny'

Gavin exposed

Samantha attacks

they win and get promoted

credits

whichever flashback

3. flashback 1 (Samantha)

flashback 2 (other guy w/ flashback)

title sequence

Rookies arrive

Gavin Pretends to be Jhonny

rookies are sent to investigate stuff.

Leah figures out Gavin's infiltration

wolf guy w/ flashback defeats the ghost

It's a training exercise

Leah follows 'Johnny'

Gavin exposed

Samantha attacks

they win and get promoted

credits

???

so, for #2, it may be cool to have every after credits sequence a flashback of one of the characters, whether serious, comical, or plot-developing.

Ignoring that for a moment, however, this is an abbreviation of the plot as discussed earlier, we need to focus on how and who says what and why. whose character's are whose? how does your character fit in, around, or on the final picture? are there going to be easter eggs, what will later be central to the plot that we will apply to the background. we talked about a hotel with ghostly customers, where will that be located. do you guys have any specific things you want in this video?

In medias res Ideas/questions

Final boss fight- who will narrate?

End of the pilot- again who will narrate? what part?