Thread:Justjackbros/@comment-27182540-20150708013657/@comment-25867149-20150914080050

Okay, so I'm back again. Don't use public internet to log in to your accounts, kids. Anyway, I've had a metaphorical stab at chapter 2, if you know what I mean. The dramatic side's okay with my draft so far but I think my preamble is a bit long-winded, and possibly a bit whimsical. As much as I like it, it doesn't suit the mood of what we're going for. Any suggestions?